My original story for the year and i've got 73 out of 100 (marks given by my teacher)

ENGLISH COMPOSITIONS

TOPIC 1 : I made a mistake in telling (him or her) my secret

As I walked into the classroom, I could see everybody smirking at me. Some of them whispered to each other and others giggled. There was a tension in air and I, as usual walked feebly to my desk. I was so exhausted as I had to catch the bus early in the morning.

I began my day as usual. But I didn’t know why, that, I had this premonition as if something bad was going to happen. I quickly reassured myself that nothing would happen. My mind started to run wild. This incident has made such an impression in my life that I could remember the vivid whenever I recalled the incident happened. The abrupt disclosure about who my biological father was had thrown me into a state of confusion. I remembered the day when my mother told me that I was a child-out-of-wedlock. I wept and wept. The naked truth really hurt me. I turned to my friend, Sophie and persuaded me that it wasn’t my fault. She promised me to keep it as a secret.

The bell rang. I startled. Hmm break time and I as usual waited for Sophie near the corridor. But, she never showed up. I insisted that she was absent. So, I walked alone to the canteen instead.

As I stepped through the school’s canteen, everybody was gazing at me. I examined myself. Did I wear my school uniform upside down or what? I sensed that something was wrong. All of a sudden, a friend of mine, Daniel – the bully started to applaud. I was puzzled and trapped between the situations. I looked around and to my tremendous surprise, there was Sophie standing near Daniel. Suddenly, she cackled. My heart started to beat uncontrollably. What if Sophie told everyone about my status? As I started debating with myself, I could hear Daniel saying, “Hey, do you all know who the real bastard in this school is?” Everybody stared at him. Looking confused. I know Daniel was referring to me.

Sophie interrupted, “It’s her! It’s Venetia!” she said jabbing a finger at me then she broke into a big-cynical-smile. Other students stopped dead in their tracks. “Flabbergasted” by the shriek, I think. Now it’s too little too late. Everyone knows about my status as a child-out-of-wedlock or to be precise, a bastard. Everybody amided a storm of laughter and some of them, I could tell feel sorry for me. I realized that, I turned to a wrong person. Sophie stabbed me in the back and spilled the beans. I don’t know what her intention was. I walked out of the canteen with so much dignity as I could muster and my eyes were brimming with tears.

After so much thinking, I went to school and to send my letter. I transferred to other school as I couldn’t face their “ice-cold stares.” I vowed that, I will never step into that school anymore after my status was revealed. Tears of anger and regret welled up in my eyes as I walked out of that school. Now, I learned that I made a mistake in telling her my secret. Well, everyone has a skeleton in their closet don’t they?

Originally written by,
Afifah Naqiyah Junaidi. (5A)
English Qualifying exam (2007)